Toothaches Are Torture|牙痛经验谈

提示：

　　『牙痛不是病，痛起来要人命！』这句话大家耳熟能详。你是否也曾经遭受牙痛之苦呢？请以 "Toothaches Are Torture" 为题，写一篇文长至少 120 个单词（words）的文章，描述自己的牙痛经验。文分两段，第一段说明自己牙痛发生的时间及原因，第二段则叙述如何解决牙痛之苦，以及给自己带来的影响。

审　题

几乎每个人都有牙痛的经验，而这惨痛的经验可能是由于不良的习惯所造成，像是爱吃甜食、不爱刷牙等。而牙痛时，许多人往往不敢或没时间去看牙医，这时除了咬紧牙关忍耐外，还有什么方法可以减轻牙痛呢？

根据提示，要描述自己的牙痛经验，可知本篇作文是记叙文，简而言之，就是在说故事。说故事的要领在于生动、有趣。除此之外，还须安排布局，要点如下：

1. 架构：不只记叙文，任何文体都要有一条线索贯穿全文。那就是开头（主题句），中间（发展）和结尾（结论）。

2. 角度：记叙文常用第一人称或第三人称的观点来叙述。前者以『我』为出发点，读起来比较亲切，后者以『他』为立场，叙述比较客观。

3. 顺序：记叙文最常用的是『按时间顺序』的方式来书写。这种方式最调理分明，容易把事情交待清楚。偶有用『倒叙法』来写，但初学者不宜尝试。

动动脑（Brainstorming）

第一段：说明牙痛在何时发生（when）及原因（why），可再加以描述当时的感觉（how）：

" 念高一时，我因为爱吃甜食而导致蛀牙，结果在期末考前一晚准备功课时，因为吃巧克力引发牙痛，感觉宛如刀子刺进牙齿里。

" 国中毕业旅行前一天，我因为不常刷牙结果牙痛，感觉有如神经被撕扯般痛不欲生。

第二段：叙述自己如何解决牙痛之苦（how），以及当时造成什么影响（what），并说明整起事件带给自己的教训（what）：

" 我试着用网络上提供的一些小撇步，像是用盐水漱口以及用冰袋敷脸颊，结果一整夜都睡不好，隔天考试当然也没考好。现在，我每半年让牙医检查一次牙齿，因为我再也不想尝到牙痛的滋味。

" 隔天早上我赶紧去看牙医，结果没有去参加毕业旅行。经过这次经验，用餐后我一定会刷牙，而且还会用牙线清洁牙缝。

利用 3 W (when, why, what) + 1 H (how)

第一段  When did you have a toothache?

" once when I was in the 10th grade

" the night before my graduation trip in junior high school

Why did you have a toothache?

" I had a sweet tooth, which led to several cavities.

" I didn't brush my teeth regularly.

How did you feel?

" The pain felt as if knives were stabbing my tooth.

" It was so painful that it felt as if all my nerves were being ripped out.

第二段  How did you get rid of it?

" I tried some Internet tips, such as rinsing my mouth out with salt water and putting an ice pack on my cheek.

" I went to a dentist the next morning.

What impact did it have?

" I didn't get a good night's sleep, nor did I do well on my final exam.

" Unfortunately, I couldn't go on the graduation trip.

结论句  What did you learn from the incident?

" Now, I get my teeth checked by a dentist every six months because I never want to have a toothache again.

" Since that experience, I've made it a rule to brush and floss my teeth after each meal.

大　纲

引导句：I clearly remember the time a toothache was killing me when I was in the 10th grade.

发展句：I had a sweet tooth, which resulted in several decayed teeth.

a.  I was cramming the night before my final exam when I got hungry.

b.  The pain hit as soon as I took a bite out of a chocolate bar, and it felt as if something was stabbing my tooth.

It was impossible to see a dentist, so I had to find a way to ease the pain myself.

a.  Tips on the Internet suggested I try rinsing my mouth with salt water and putting ice on my cheek.

b.  I managed to stop the pain and fall asleep, but I didn't get much rest.

c.  Not surprisingly, I didn't do very well on my test.

结论句：Now, I get my teeth checked by a dentist every six months because I don't want to experience a toothache ever again.

范文：

I clearly remember the time a toothache was killing me when I was in the 10th grade. I had a sweet tooth, which led to several cavities. I was studying the night before my final exam when I got hungry and had a snack. The pain hit as I bit down on a chocolate bar, and it felt as if knives were stabbing my tooth.

It was impossible to see a dentist, so I had to find a way to ease the pain myself. I tried some Internet tips, such as rinsing my mouth out with salt water and putting an ice pack on my cheek. I managed to curb the pain and fall asleep, but I didn't get a good night's sleep. Needless to say, I didn't do so well on my test. Now, I get my teeth checked by a dentist every six months because I never want to have a toothache again.

　　我记得很清楚在我念高一的时候，有一次牙痛让我痛不欲生。那时我因为爱吃甜食而有几颗蛀牙。期末考前一天的晚上我正在准备考试时，因为肚子饿吃点心。当我咬下巧克力棒时突然一阵疼痛，这种痛的感觉宛如刀子刺进牙齿里。

　　要去看牙医是不可能的，因此我得自己找方法来减轻疼痛。我试了网络上提供的一些小秘诀，像是用盐水漱口以及用冰袋敷脸颊。我设法抑制住疼痛然后入睡，却一整晚都睡不好。不用说，隔天的考试我当然考不好。现在，我每 6 个月就会去检查牙齿，因为我再也不想尝到牙痛的滋味了。